A Red Smear in the Blackness

[dirty_bass]

A real dark, atmospheric thing I`m working on.
Quite abstract.
More music to commit suicide to really.

There are a lot of really strange elements here, so please let me know your opinions, as I`m finding it hard fitting these elements together.

http://mysite.freeserve.com/dirty_bass_records/tunes/A_Red_Smear_in_the_Blackness.mp3

[dan the acid man]

i'll give it a listen in a moment, i'll just get rid of all my razor's, sharp object's and bit's of rope first :lol:

[Patrick DSP]

pure class :clap: :clap: :clap:

ken nordine would love this!

[dan the acid man]

bloody awesome, i cant really say anything else, but simply awesome!!
i love the vocal, the gritty grainy effect on it really add's something, and the percussion is sweet

[The Overfiend]

This is why we're into techno.
Period.

[dirty_bass]

Cheers DSP for the scarey children sounds.

[Sunil]

I think this is a good track but that vocal holds it back, the same effect on it the whole way gets on my nerves a little, sorry! Maybe I just wanted it to sound a touch more human or something, but it dominates the track too much, it'd be nice to hear it used a touch more sparingly. The backbone of the track is very nice though, I feel there's more life to come out there if you wanted. This sounds like a finished track, I just think you could have a better version up your sleeve if you applied a few changes.

[Miromiric]

is good, is good. i think it is nice, especially the dreamy synth stabs. it would be much better without cheesy vocals though imho.

[dirty_bass]

Well, I`m gonna tweak, and clean it up, add edits, and make some adjustments to the ambience.
But the vocal stays, as it is. Inhuman, and long and "cheesy".

[Adverse]

good.

[Tyrisia]

here here!

Brilliant track btw.

[dan the acid man]

good, i personally love the vocal as it is, but music is all about personal preferances ;)

[dirty_bass]

To be honest I understand why a lot of people won`t like the vocal.
Vocals these days, are instantly "cheesy" with a lot of techno people.

But this is a way I am heading, both with spoken word (another artform in itself) and my own sung or spoken word vocals.
It`s part of my drive to make techno that can be identified with more, that has more of a message than just abstract emotions or drug references.
I would like to appeal to wider audience than just techno people, cos we need more people. Not selling out, or making commercial stuff, but I want to take a more Band like approach, rather than just making tracks.
I dunno maybe I`m going mad?

[Evil G]

i read that as saying you are writing songs, rather than tracks, which i think is commendable.

[Miromiric]

To be honest I understand why a lot of people won`t like the vocal.
Vocals these days, are instantly "cheesy" with a lot of techno people.


mind you i use vocals in almost every tune, but this one in particular sound a bit dark simulated to me. maybe they would sound better without pitchshifter?

[BloodStar]

cool track. Vocal is gr8, but it stays for too long in the track what affects the rest, imo., but it's good. I like its darkness..

[Sunil]

To be honest I understand why a lot of people won`t like the vocal.
Vocals these days, are instantly "cheesy" with a lot of techno people.

But this is a way I am heading, both with spoken word (another artform in itself) and my own sung or spoken word vocals.
It`s part of my drive to make techno that can be identified with more, that has more of a message than just abstract emotions or drug references.
I would like to appeal to wider audience than just techno people, cos we need more people. Not selling out, or making commercial stuff, but I want to take a more Band like approach, rather than just making tracks.
I dunno maybe I`m going mad?

I don't think vocals in techno are cheesy, one thing I think techno needs *a lot* more of is vocals, to give it more individuality. I just think this sounds slightly commercial in its current form. I dunno, maybe because it's a full passage from a film or wherever it was taken from, it makes it sound like the soundtrack or something. I think the vocal could sound better, this one is tiring to listen to after a while, although maybe it's because it's been overused in the track.

[Buttman]

Sounds nice but maybe a bit drowned in delays/reverbs. I would ditch the voice though (or change it for something non-American) ;)

[dirty_bass]

It`s staying :cool:
Commercial? Cool, maybe MTV will play it, and I`ll finally be able to buy the mercedes I`ve allways wanted.
Cheers for the tips and stuff, normally I take em on board, but this time I`m sticking to my guns.

I have finalised and remastered this now, but the track has been taken by a label, so no repost I`m affraid.

[dan the acid man]

It`s staying :cool:
Commercial? Cool, maybe MTV will play it, and I`ll finally be able to buy the mercedes I`ve allways wanted.
Cheers for the tips and stuff, normally I take em on board, but this time I`m sticking to my guns.

I have finalised and remastered this now, but the track has been taken by a label, so no repost I`m affraid.

good, let us know when it's coming out :cool:

[Col]

same old quality steve. im with sunil on the vocal though, it is a little dominating.

this could be a classic though, it kinda reminds me of green velvets "la la land"

anyway, congratulations on the deal.

[dirty_bass]

Well then dammit, I`ll do a dub version on my next live PA, so that dancefloor people don`t have to suffer the irony of the vocal.
That way, everybody is happy.
Unless someone wants to remix?

[The Divide]

I Like it Stevo

The vocal does tend to clutter with the highs in the track but the chopper seems to help it sit. I personally would leave it in


Unless someone wants to remix?

I would sacrifice a small animal for a tinker with that vocal

[dirty_bass]

Hmmm, well, I`ve got 2 peeps I`m sending the files for remixing, but I`ll send you the stuff for self inflicted soon.