first track, need feedback

[michealbr0ke]

Hi, this is the first track i've finished. i would appreciate some feedback, especially on the compostition. Heres the link, should be fast..
greetz micheal

[MARKEG]

well for your first track i'd be very proud of yourself. keep going!

if anything, it seems that one of your delays that isnt quite right (the sound that comes in at (0:27). it sounds slightly out. or it could another element in there. dunno without being there to mute and solo things :=] definitely some elements of this need 'tightening' up.

my person opinion is that 'tightness' should be your next mission. you've got some wicked ideas, no need to worry about that at all. take it to the next level m8! :D

[michealbr0ke]

thnx for the reply mark! i did the delay thing on purpose, thought it didnt sound wrong.. but i'm gonna try to make it more tight.
i made another, more 'experimental' :), track. could u give me some feedback on this one?
greetz micheal

[MARKEG]

yeah but things like delays really have to be in time unless they're very very very stand out/good/unique/innovative and a particularly anthemic part of the track. sure it's good to be clever in techno, but delays definitely have to be spot on most of the time.